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This week we are learning about explanations. We had to make a success criteria for them here is mine.

Escape of Alcatraz 1

This is some writing me and my friends have been working on. I hope you enjoy it!

KABOOM! A huge explosion rocked the nearby buildings of the financial district. The towers threatened to collapse. It was chaos. Smoke billowed from the towers. White fire burst out and knocked over innocent people walking down the street. It was a huge attack on the city of San Francisco. Every man who could help was there. Two figures ran to a group of fallen citizens. “Quickly!” shouted Mackenzie.

“Come on, come on!” they ran as fast as they could but by the time they got to the corner… BOOM! They got busted just like that. “HAHA you made it almost too easy for me, Of to Alcatraz for you boys, HAHAHA!” The Policeman said. “DARN!” said Mackenzie

“NOOO!” Shouted Angus

Mackenzie and Angus were sent to court for multiple murder. The argument was quite interesting for the judge. And they lost the argument. And if things could not get worse, they were sentenced to 6 years in Alcatraz, a terrifying prison island in San Francisco Bay…

The  boat to Alcatraz had another inmate. A tall, thin man who had thick handcuffs on.  Mackenzie shuffled nervously towards him. “Um, hi,” said Mackenzie.  “Hurumph,” said the figure. THUD! The boat had made contact with the wharf. Angus and Mackenzie were escorted off and the other figure was double-handcuffed and escorted up to the prison block. On the way, Angus asked the tall figure, “What’s ya name?”, “Jimmy,” said the figure. “ Jimmy was escorted off the boat by two armed guards towards solitary confinement…

 The rest of the day was uneventful except for Jimmy being moved to the normal cells. Jimmy sat away from Angus and Mackenzie at dinner. Jimmy sat nervously wedged between Al Capone and the Birdman. The dinner was spaghetti bolognese. The next day they looked at the bars, waiting for the food to come but it didn’t. The next day they didn’t get food either. But the day after that the guards threw a panting, sweaty (but well dressed) man in a cell and also threw some soda and chips in. The guards grunted in unison (We don’t know how), and told the friends and the other assorted people that this was Colonel Mustard’s birthday party. SO…… everyone started eating the delicious food and laughing like crazy! But then Jimmy remembered. ”Hey wait a minute, isn’t Colonel Mustard from that boardgame Cluedo?” And with that, he fainted.

 “Gah!” Whispered the new (and nicely dressed) man, tapping the steel walls, “We’re trapped in this darned… whatever this is. Ah! Wait, no... Yes! Let’s call it the steel box.” “Wow, look,” Angus muttered with all of his strength, “more food.” And then he went back to sleep. “Where do you come from?” whispered Jimmy to the man, “And what’s your name?” “Well, one, I don’t know. And two, My name is Kyle. By the way, have I told you I don’t know where we are? If I have, sorry.” And then he went back to strangely tapping different parts of the wall. Jimmy thought for a while then started saying, “Do you-”

 “Hey listen! If I tap different parts I can make different sounds listen to this!” .... ....  .. ...  . .....  /  .. .  ... ....  ... ....  . ....  /  .. ....  .... ...  /  . ....  .... ..  .... .....  .. ..  .. ..  . .....  . ....

“You know what that was?” He grinned.

“I don’t know, but-”,

“It says the food is drugged!”

“That's right, sonny” laughed the guard

“arrrrRRG!” groaned Angus

“TRUTH drugs!” the guard commented

“HA HA HA” laughed Delirious Mackenzie

That's when all Panic broke loose. Convicts in all of the cells dropped whatever they were eating and pounded on the bars. That's when one convicted gang member (although it was never proven) yelled “I Supp PPP pose this is what I des sss serve since I killed thatttttt nice yoooooooung chap whooooo lived down the roadddddd”

“HA! It WORKS!” yelled one guard

That's when Angus vomited all over the floor. He had a severe allergy to carfentanil, the main ingredient in the drug.

“Oh Fudge,” said the guard.

The Next day Angus woke up. Except he wasn’t in the cell. There was a doctor over him. He looked across at the wall. There was a monitor with his heart rate on it. it was at… 23 beats a minute!

“AAAAAAARRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRGGGGGGGGGGG!!!”

Back in the prison, an unlucky guard was sweeping up the gooey mess that came from Angus because he was hunched over, the keys on his belt were just outside Kyle’s cell. Then he tried to grab them. That's when the gun gallery officer realised what was going on and attempted to shoot Kyle. Unfortunately, he was a bad aim and the bullets impacted on the cleaners butt. The cleaner screamed the gun gallery officer panicked. Kyle grabbed the keys of the floor and cleverly unlocked the door. Then he raced to the nearest cell (Mackenzie) and unlocked it. Then he gave the keys to Mackenzie who unlocked Jimmy and another convict. Mackenzie then threw the keys to the convict. Then they ran for the door knocking out the guards. A whole gang of convicts ran out with them, and they found  themselves stranded in a forest. The Alcatraz forest, that was. All it contained were 2 immature apple trees planted by the warden. All 13 inmates ran into them. Then the US marines (and the warden who started to cry), who had come to Alcatraz to train. When they saw the convicts, the battle was on. The convicts were armed with twigs while the marines were armed with submachine guns. It was a massacre. One marine was knocked out but the convicts were killed. Jimmy pretended to be shot. Kyle and Mackenzie ran into a crack in one of the walls and found themselves inside a weird maze which you had to be a guard to get the map. And so they ran back out to the battlefield, and upon finding Jimmy, they both said their prayers to him because they thought he was dead. “Hey guys,” he whispered, “I’m still alive you know.”

“Gahh! Everybody run! There are zombies!”

The ‘zombies’ were guards escaping on a helicopter that had a drawing of the moon on it.

The Guards started running into their space decorated helicopter and tried to fly to the moon while drinking beer and wine. “Huh,” Said Jimmy, “I never noticed that before.” Then the guards landed on the recreation field.

“This is the MOOOOOOOOOOOOON!!!!” he said

Then the helicopter exploded because a marine thought that it was an escape vehicle, and shot it.

IN THE hospital unit, the friends looked at all the guards dramatically trapped in the hand cuffs. The guards were groaning in pain because the handcuffs were on too tight and it hurt their wrist. “Help!” cried the guards but it was to no reward as Mackenzie knocked them out. They were just getting Angus out when… A battalion of marines came through the door.

BLAM BLAM BLAM BLAM!! The marines started firing. 42 bullets hit the nurse, 2 hit angus in the leg, 12 missed Kyle, 1 hit Mackenzie and he fell, and Jimmy faked to be shot. “HA HA HA” laughed the marine captain, armed with a colt peacemaker. “You are the worst killers! You didn’t bother to arm yourselves!” Then there was a shout and 32 convicts stormed the medic bay. Machine Gun Kelly led the way armed with a Thompson 1932. BANG!BANG!BANG!BANG!BANG!BANG!BANG!BANG!BANG!BANG!BANG!BANG!BANG!BANG!BANG!BANG!BANG!BANG!BANG!BANG!

31 marines fell in the first 2 seconds.

Jimmy picked up a Thompson M4A4.

Kyle found a rifle.

Mackenzie and Angus were carried out on stretchers.

And then they all ran down the hill to the Ferry off the island. They were running when the Warden came the around the corner. He was no longer crying and actually seemed like he was enjoying it.

A standoff

A duel

“I’ll fight someone.” Said the warden “ANYONE! If you win, you are free to go. The marines may stand in your way but that is not a problem. I am the problem. IF YOU LOSE you ALL DIE! It is a fight to the death. Leave your weapons on the ground.”

“Who will fight me”

“I Will,” said Jimmy

The Warden gave him a 6 shot colt peacemaker.

Then they stood away from the convicts and then the warden shouted

“En Garde”

And fired.

The bullet raced across the path, hitting him in the leg. He screamed in pain. He realised that if he did nothing everyone would die. Then Jimmy cocked using the hammer and… Click! It slid back hitting the flint realising a spark that ignited gunpowder and… There was a loud bang, Jimmy’s shot… To nothing. There was no bullet. The gun was empty. “HAHAHA” yelled the warden. “This is the end of you!” Then he advanced menacingly towards Jimmy, Colt in one hand, 6 bullets in the other…

TO BE CONTINUED…

Random Tuesday Descriptive Writing

A small, blackened thing was appearing in the distance. It was surrounded by thick bushy leaves. The closer I was the more I could make out its shape. The smell of mould and mildew was obvious the closer I came to the mysterious shape. As I got nearer to the weird object I realized what it was... ...it was a BATHTUB! an old, mouldy, ripped, leaf filled bathtub! With nothing better to do I turned the tap. The sound of metal on metal filled the quiet air. A few seconds later a trickle of ex-stagnant water flowed out of the tap. It had a distinctive green hue. Then I looked around myself. It looks like a badly looked after bathroom. I notice a broken switch on the wall. CLICK!. The globes on the ceiling burst into light. Not old, hot incandescent light but new, cool Blue, LED light. Then I get the strange feeling that I'm being watched...

The fox and the girl.

WALT: use paragraphs

I dove under the fence and raced towards the nearest bird. Then I sunk my sharp teeth into the duck. Then a horrible human ran out towards me. “GHAA!” he yelled “ THE DREADED FOX” as he was ripping up weeds. He ran around the corner of a small shack at the edge of the property. When he returned he was carrying a shotgun. BANG! went the shotgun and then he started running towards me. Another lead bullet whizzed past me. With that I dive into the bush, hiding under a fallen spruce branch. Then I run. I dive through the boreal forest. Then I hear footsteps. THOSE PESKY HUMANS! Adrenalin takes control. I dive into a pile of ferns, then… THUD! something hard hits me. A human girl! “gotcha!” she yells, furious. I stare up at it and it stares at me. Then its expression changes. Its arms move up. It has let me go! A MIRACLE!

Later the weather took a turn for the worst. At first, it was cold, but then it started snowing. The spruce trees started frosting up. Then I hear a loud THUMP! I look around to see the human girl unconscious, probably hypothermia. With the temperature dropping, there is no chance of her survival. Because she saved me, I decided to return the favor. I leap through the bushes, to her. Then I keep her warm by acting like a scarf, trapping heat in. Now she will survive. Now the big question is will I survive?

One cold stormy night later…

I am still with the girl, who is still breathing. Then two humans come from a shrub. The oldest one is leaning on a shotgun. The other one races towards the girl, so I dive behind a log. The younger human picks up the girl, who smiles at me. The humans then leave. I dive back to the bushes, to get to my family as the humans climb the last hill to there home.

NSL: describe the characters well.

Boy on a bike

WALT: use google draw to create a scene from a text

First we read a story called ‘Boy on a Bike’ written by Bronwen Wall. It was about a boy travelling the length of the North Island, on a fat bike, to raise money for the St John Ambulance service.

fat bike = A bike which has wheels that are so fat that the bike doesn't sink in sand, mud and snow. Fat bikes are very safe and perfect for travelling off road.

The somme

The Somme

By Jimmy

I hate the trenches. They are muddy and stinky. And there are millions of rats. I am with my friend Yotam here. I am holding my rifle, ready to shoot. Then I see something coming. Something red and heading straight towards me. “RUN!” I yell. Me and Yotam Dive out of the trench. “GET BA…” yells the commander but he never finishes his sentence as a shell incinerates the trench. Me and Yotam run through dead trees. Dirt flies around us. It is a machine gun! But the shooters are missing on purpose. Then I hear someone yell “get into the camp!” Me and Yotam run in and are greeted by a soldier. “Get in!” he yells. In the camp there is a big fire, cooking our dinner. There are also canvas tents. After dinner me and Yotam head to the tent. Then there is a rumbling sound. I instantly turn around to find a tank heading towards the camp! “Run!” yells the commander. Me and Yotam run into the dead trees. The tank advances on us. In between the dead trees are machine guns. The commander told us about them. I get behind one, take aim, and pull the trigger. BANG! BANG! BANG! BANG! BANG! BANG! BANG! BANG! BANG! BANG! BANG! fire erupts from the barrel. I pull out the round. Then something cold and hard presses the back of my head. I pull my arms up. Then the soldiers lead me and Yotam away.

When I wake up the next day I am in a prisoner of war camp. Yotam is next to me. Then the germans guarding me give me a box. “To You” he grunts. Yotam also gets a box. On it it says “open in a weeks time” so I put it away. One week in a prisoner of war camp is torture. It is almost as bad as the trenches. After one week I open the biscuits. In it there is a message saying. The raisins are burnt and crunchy. I didn’t like burt raisins so I pulled them out. Then Yotam Nudged me. “the raisins are gold nuggets” he whispered. I quickly pulled out the gold and when I got it all out it formed a pile. “What that” grunted the german on guard “Gold” I said quietly “you can have it if we get 5 minutes outside. “ok” he grunted and opened the door. As soon as I was let out I grabbed a rifle from the rack and stuffed all the ANZAC biscuits in my mouth and ran. I couldn't load the rifle so instead I just whacked it over the head of anyone I came across. I ran into a tent to grab a revolver but instead I found something else. A secret plan! I grabbed it and a revolver on the table. Then ran. Yotam followed me. As I ran a Soldier stopped me. I thought he was going to shoot me but then he yelled “GET IN THE TANK”. He was an allied soldier. I jumped into the tank with Yotam and we drove away. On the way back I showed him the information. As it turned out, It was very useful… 2 years later… On my return to new zealand with Yotam we both had ww1 medals, everyone did. But I had another medal for finding the plans. I am so happy to be home…

The End

NSL: use paragraphs and describe the characters well

Stick Dog - personal responce

The World Would Be A Better Place If Everyone Was Like Me

1. If everyone kept their Lego star wars and Lego city separate!
2. If everyone put their Kathmandu jackets on coat hangers! Dad!
3. If everyone made their hot chocolates with avalanche powder and frothed milk!
4. If everyone didn't brag and brag and exaggerate!
5. If everyone stopped hating fruit salad with grapes! 

Ocean Ocelots

The Ocean Ocelot Website

How to survive your first night in minecraft

WALT: Use adverbs to hook the reader in.

WALT: Use at least 4 paragraphs.

Equipment

• wood
• sticks
• stone
• wood planks
• crafting table

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CRAFTING

SURVIVAL

Things to help you

Key:

0 = wood planks

\ = stick

# = coal

@ = stone

Zz = wool

CRAFTING

1. First access your crafting table with wood and place it in the four squares and turn it into planks.
2. Second put one plank into each square and an odd shape will come out, this is a crafting table. It is useful and will make probably anything

0	0
0	0

3. to make sticks put to wood planks on top of each other like this. Sticks will come in handy but don’t try to take on a creeper with it

	0
	0

4. To make a pickaxe, put 3 wood planks on the top row and 2 sticks on the bottom like this: A pick will mine stone and coal but not ores like iron, gold, diamond, emerald or lapis lazuli

0	0	0
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	\

5. To make a sword put one stick on the bottom with two planks on top of them. This can defend you and is good in combat

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	0
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6. To make a house build an L shape into a cliff. block up the entrance but leave one block open to see when day comes.

7. Your house is probably dark. Be warned. Monsters can spawn anywhere dark. To light it up make torches out of coal. Coal is stone with black dots in it. Mine it with your pick and get a lump of coal. Go to your crafting table and put it on a stick like this

	#
	\

8. To make a bed (OPTIONAL) put 3 wood on the bottom row of a crafting table and 3 wool (any colour) above it. To get wool kill a sheep and it will drop one piece of wool.

zz	zz	zz
0	0	0

9. If you don’t have a bed, you will have to fight the monsters or make tools. When making your house you should have cobblestone and replace the wood on tools to have stronger tools. Here are the recipes.

@	@	@
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12. You might have to fight monsters. There are skeletons, zombies, spiders deadly creepers, witches and rare endermen. The next part is about survival against monsters.

SURVIVAL

1. Zombies are the easiest to kill and just repeatedly hit them until they die. They drop rotten flesh and rarely drop Iron tools and potatoes and carrots. They will burn at daytime but water will stop them.

2. Skeletons Have Bows and will shoot you so be fast and hit them quickly and retreat, hit retreat. They will burn at daytime but water will stop them. They will drop bones, arrows and will rarely drop bows.

3. Creepers and spiders are harder to kill because they can move around a lot and have more agility. Creepers are sneaky they live up to there name, creeping around before they kill you, by blowing up. The best way to kill them is to hit them with well timed blows of a sword. If you kill them you get gunpowder. Creepers don’t die at day and can swim and climb ladders.

4. Spiders can climb and will be hostile at day. They will try to climb over walls and attack. They have a venomous bite. They are harder than zombies. To kill one do skeleton method of hit retreat. Try to get the higher ground. This will stop a spider pouncing to your level.
5. The spider has a rare cousin that you will not find but I will put the image in

6. You will not have to worry about witches but if you see one run away. It will try to make you slow, weak, use a potion called instant harming and poison.

7. Watch out for endermen, a 3 metre tall black person. They are neutral until attacked and they will go crazy, teleporting and hitting you until you die. My cousin tried to kill an enderman with his fist. EPIC FAIL!!! An endermans secret weapon is to teleport. They are rare.*

Things to help you

Official handbooks.

Stamplongnose how to minecraft (Click Here)

For Hardcore users popularmmos evil minecraft (Click here)

*see like an enderman (Click here)